Originally Posted by JAPOV
Ha! I even heard a British accent grin
I also drive on the left side of the road


Originally Posted by Guy E. Trepanier
AABABA song.
Lennonesque...
Excellent!

Thanks, Guy!

Originally Posted by E Swartz
I heard Lennon, but also a Kinks type melody or maybe even Bowie.

Suffice to say, this was raw, yet captivating--loved it. I can hear so many cool arrangement things that could be done with this!

steady-eddie

Thanks steady... I, too, hear a lot of what could be accomplished in a studio. Since I don't have a studio for such things, I left it as a sketch. Glad you like it.

Originally Posted by bennash
I got nothing about AI in this song , just stay out of trouble
Thats pretty well done , You could do a lot with a producer with it , in a studio

Yeah, buddy!


Originally Posted by David Gill
Nicely done, Tom. You got a good one here, sir.


Peace,

Dave

Thanks, David. I appreciate it!

Originally Posted by Gavin Sinclair
Great song! And yes, I heard all the influences others have pointed out. No bad thing! Sounds grat.

My only suggestion would be change "Take on the fire" to "Step into the fire."

The AI thing works with your introduction. I'm not sure I would have got it without that.

Hi Gavin, and thanks for stopping by. "Take on the fire" was the inspiration behind the song, and besides, I do have "step in the box" as a line in the first verse.
As far as not getting the meaning behind my lyric.... ambiguity is how I like to write. Only this time (and maybe from now on) I am going to preface what my intent is. It's a wonderful thing, if done right, to have a song mean different things to different people.