Originally Posted by Michael W. Brown
Nice, poppy tune. Some strong writing...nicely captures a young woman's angst in the real world and I can see it's relatability for that sub culture. A little disappointed at the sparse production given the dynamic descriptors you popped into SUNO. I'm certainly no producer or sound engineer but at the very least, I would crank up the production some, add some heft and instrumentation. I realize you want to sell the song more than the artificially inseminated bells and whistles that SUNO offers, but that is what they are doing in today's Pop, from what I've heard. IMO SUNO can do a much better job at not only selling this well written commentary for the young mother's, but you'll want a catchy (er) more relative sound to pull them into her well penned pity party. Maybe with more of a dramatic, young, 20 somethin, feminine histrionics/dynamics and angst. A little more bite? It's growing over her head, why not a little out of it to? Just a thought, Rob.
Well done sir.

Thanks Michael for the thoughtful feedback! I actually made the production deliberately sparse in places. The prompt I gave SUNO specifically called for “sparse and conversational” verses, with the arrangement gradually building toward the chorus. I wanted to leave some space for the lyrics rather than have instrumentation competing with them.

To my ears, the song is already extremely catchy, and I really like the contrast between the quieter sections and the bigger moments. It has a contemporary pop feel that reminds me a bit of the kind of restrained production you hear from artists like Taylor Swift or Olivia Rodrigo.

But of course, we all hear songs differently. I can definitely understand wanting more “bite” and heft, and that's the beauty of getting feedback from other songwriters. I'm very happy with how this one turned out, though. Thanks again for listening and for the suggestions!

Last edited by Rob B.; 08/31/26 03:57 AM.