Hi Key,
Welcome to the board , if I didn't already do that,
I like your C. Seems like a good title and idea. I like the story, but needs
tobe a little plainer unless you want to leave it somwhat "mysterious"
I don't know too much about R& B and even less about neo-soul, but I'll express a couple thoughts.
Yeah, a little uncertain whether you got thegirl or not. In some genres, that all right though.
Come of the corresponding V lines seem like would be difficult to sing to the same melody , as is customary in most genres,
Being as the last line of V 2 , "nesr rhymes" back to the 4th
I'd like to see the last line of V 1 do the same. Maybe something like ----"Love's whirlwind takes me to the skies",not meant to be a line,as is, just a thought.
Good luck with it
Wy