I love your melody as much on this side of the boards...as
the other Moker... Left my lyrical comment on board 3.
Heidi has given you an alternate way of strengthening the lyrics.
Rebecca writes excellent lyrics...it's just something is missing here....It doesn't feel complete.

best to you and good luck with this...
Kaley smile

Songs for Adults
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=8404
Songs for Kids:
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=6469
Andy & Friends CD
http://www.cdbaby.com/cd/kwwg
Kaley and Wy's Songs Put To Animation:
http://www.flashfast.com/kids/