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Hi Roxy,
Gotta say I am REALLY enjoying your songs here!
Your vocals are great. Mmm-hm, a comparison to Gladys Knight is not undeserved. Have you heard any of her recent stuff? Love that too.

I love your brother's voice--it's very nice. And that's your daughter on the higher parts? You're all very good singers. But, I have to go with majority vote: stick to a solo here. You could use her higher harmonies possibly, but pull them down lower in the mix so it's not distracting. And write a song for your brother to sing.

Great theme and hook. I have to agree a 3:30-ish cut would be more commercial. Can't figure out where to cut though... maybe combining ideas from the verses so you can take one out, might be the path of least resistance. You could also look at rearranging the structure. Right now you have: C - V - V - B - C - V which is somewhat nontraditional. Wouldn't hurt to try a V - C - V - B - C and see if you like it that way. Another option is to bring up the tempo. I think you could speed it up a bit without hurting it.

The backing back sounds very nice. Good feel and fit to the song. There was one loud "PLUNK!" (high up) on the piano that distracted me... otherwise flowed good for me.

Thanks again for another very nice listen!
If these are your rough cuts-- I can't wait to hear the finished product! Nice, nice work.

Linda