Hey Eric,

Here's a fine example of a verse not full of a bunch of extra syllables (I throw myself at the mercy of the court!), but loaded with a good story and some great imagery.

I particularly liked the second half of your first verse:

open up a bottle
pour me a drink
mix it with moonlight
shinin in on me....


My only little nit is the "Everybody's got to cry sometime" line, which is a bit reminiscent of REM's line "Everybody cries/ And everybody hurts sometimes." Certainly, the context is a different, but since you use it twice, it really caught my eye.
Would offer you a replacement line if I could think of one, and certainly, it's your song, so KOS.

Thanks for sharing,
Beth grin

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