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Hi Lynn,

This is a familiar tale, but I do like the sweet urgency you've conveyed -- (a combination one wouldn't expect!)

I'll have to chime in with everyone else...especially Calvin, who stole my favorite lines:

It’s obvious that this has gone far past a friendship stage,
I know you feel the way I do, so help me turn the page..

Personally, I'm also happy to see someone writing more than a few words per line -- no one seems to want to buy any of my "Syllables for Sale" (LOL) .....

As for the bridge, perhaps you could make it more of a global statement, rather than a specific incident of theirs? Such as:

Crossing the line's never easy
There's no going back once you start
But to let love slip away untested
Is unfair to the friend and the heart

Totally keep or sweep, as usual. I tend to get a lit poesy-ish, and I'm not sure how well it would fit with your POP version.

Good luck, and I look forward to hearing where this goes.

Ciao for now,
Beth