Hi Barry. I like the simplicity of this. Fewer words often make a much more powerful statement. The chorus provides a unique contrast to the verses when the singer ends up being a bit more wordy, thus your title. Neat effect.

With music added, I can envision the verses rolling along slow and deliberate, choosing words carefully, and then the chorus just blurting out this guy's true feelings, almost babbling to the point of incoherence. Should make a really cool song. Hope the experiment pays off.

Greg


Last edited by Greg C. Brown; 10/06/08 10:50 PM.

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