Hi Sherry,

Glad to meet you. This is an enjoyable listen, helped greatly by your singing and playing. The overall production sounded really good too. But, if I had to nit pick it, and I do, I'd suggest some more substance in your lyrics. I think it's the weakest link in this song.

everywhere i went i saw things
we used to do

doing things you never thought you could

knowing what i did was so wrong

These lines are all rather generic. There's little to no imagery here. You have many opportunities to paint some pictures about this guy, don't waste them. The bridge is also a great place to wake up the listener, tell us something new, but yours is a bit weak.

Musically, this is really good and I think if you work on the lyrics more, you can elevate this from just an OK song overall to a much better one, maybe even a great one.

Welcome to jpf. Hope you stick around and share more of your music and return the favor of critiquing the songs of others here on the forum.

Ricki

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