Originally Posted by Little_stevie_b
As for focusing just on her, it's a wedding and both have butterflies in their stomachs (baby your so moi and I'm so vous, like a chocolate vow I melted into you, etc.)so it had to include the guy as well but after the bridge it all focuses on her again.

Yeah, I got that about the butterflies. But IMO it didn't work that great... especially since the 1st chorus is so sexy (or at least double entendre) ... the 2nd chorus is kind of a letdown.

I think a repeat of C1 after V2 would work absolutely fine with no changes to the lyrics even necessary. And, upon revisiting, maybe calling yourself (the guy) a Centrifugal Sundae in C2 seems kind of odd. I'm not sure it works? SHE is the Centrifugal Sundae! At least she should be IMO.

I imagine the wedding this was for is over?... It might not hurt to refashion a version for posterity that's just the best overall song possible?

Anyway, no problems either way... just my 2¢. It's all good!

Peace,

Ian



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