Geneva,

Hello and nice to meet you! Maybe we will cross paths someday as my wife's parents live in eugene. She grew up there and I in Corvallis.

Definitely a sensitive subject and I am trying not to use harsh or extremely descriptive lyrics to tell this story. It involves my wife's sister. Last summer, after other confrontations, she had to get in her car with her two very small children and race through the streets to get away as he was chasing her. She slammed into a curb while attempting a u-turn and had to run into someones house that she did not know and call the police. He is in jail and due to get out this summer. She is living here and doing very well under the circumstances but I can see her possibly going back to him. Pretty tough for us to think about.

You have hit the melody almost spot on. These lyrics are much better and I thank you for taking the time. I'm sure I will use some of them if its ok with you. I absolutely love the tag and can here it in my mind at the end of the song. Brilliant! I can't wait to get out my guitar and see how I can make some of this fit.

I think I also agree with the title "wish you had it made" or something similar. It's kind of hard to sing about wishing you could tell something to someone who is still alive and that you can talk to. I mean just tell them right? I still may incorporate a line about wanting to say something but would it make a difference? (Unless that does not fit within the frame of the song)

Actually the more I think about it saying "I wish you had it made" might be enough to get that point across. We shall see.

I will probably bother you again for more advice if that is ok and if you would be interested in a co-write or collab let me know.

THANK YOU AGAIN!

Ricky


Last edited by Ricky Layne; 05/04/11 02:14 PM.