Th(is) WAY of Re-(DING) Lyics IS diffiCULT.

But...it is very difficult to post lyrics in a way that gives the reader the best idea of how the song is to be made from them.
While avoiding the "it doesn't scan well", or "I can't find a melody" critiques, it also presents a post that isn't easy to read or stay connected to.

It's a choice tho'. I haven't figured out a balance. It really is impossible to tie the lyric to a melody without hearing the melody, scansion is basic, you can read for that, but melody and music just can't be written into a lyric. So, in trying to present those aspects, the lyricist compromises the readers ability to follow the lyric.

So, without all the quotations and notations, the reader doesn't know where the song goes, but with them, the written lyric is hard to follow. However, a lyric that scans in meter, reads just fine all on it's own, regardless of melody or music.

Not so much a critique of your lyric Stan, more of the style in which it is presented, which is a matter of choice really. I mean, what can you do aside from presenting it with the sung melody in a MP3 to emphasize the changes?

A songwriter who presents a lyric has the ability to present it with the song and the reader can listen as well as read along. A lyrics only contributor has but the written format to present his idea. It's been a challenge to find a way to do this so my comments here are more a going over of what I notice works and why.

Go Lightning!

Tom


New member, Lyrics only contributor, looking to collaborate.