Well Andy, I don't think your vocal is as crappy as you think. It showcased the song and gave me a feel of what it supposed to sound like.

A few points as a lead guitarist....You accent stops on the verses with that 1 guitar. I'd stop the 1st two times, then let the chords hang the next 2, stopping on the last--if that makes sense. It's already staccato in verse spots so maybe a little bit of a different texture would make it stand out.

I'd lose that Freebird type thing you have going after the 2nd chorus. It come out of nowhere and adds nothing--actually takes away from the feel of the tune. Go right into that breakdown right after that.

Add some soloing during that whole last chorus...high notes....nothing distracting. Also, if you brought the drums up in the mix it would kick more, and this needs to kick a##.

Good start.

Zeek