Hi Scotty,

I had more of an ABAB on this one and use alot of near rhymes, and vowel rhymes if I'm hurtin' for words.

I see what you're saying and I appreciate all the feedback and help I can get! Commercial hasn't crossed my mind, I haven't put in my time as a writer yet. I don't have a song I believe in enough to put out for a demo, so that sounds like a waste of money to me, knowing whats on the market.

I may redo this later and change the rhyme, I really appreciate your ideas!

Geneva