I was just on the general message forum reading Brians post on critiques.

My personal reason for posting for critiques is to use you'alls help to become a better writer, and this will be rewritten in time. I appreciate everyones thoughts and comments and consider them all in the rewrite. So..... If I went to far bringing Jesus into the song, I wanna know it if you feel this way, if anyone else can't find meter or feels it's too wordy, I wanna know that too.

These things don't hurt my feelings, and if they did, I'd still need to hear them if my goal is to improve my writing, so please don't hold back with me! All of your thoughts are important to me!

Geneva