Hi Richard,
Good country story line. good melody and Kudos to Kim on the vocal.
Yeah,the jump from 1st V to pre, probably will throw some people. You'd pobably get a difference of opinion in different sites as to how well it works. Course there's always a difference of opinion between "It should explain itself as it goes along" and the "Twist" song.
For whatever reason, Kim seems to hold it all together and make it work. Maybe her rather "Plaintive" for want of a better word, delivery. You kinda sense right away what happened.
All JMO
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