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My Les Paul

I walked down to the beer joint
hopin' to prove I's better than them
I showed 'em my razor, puked twice,
they finally let me in

I strode with my Les Paul into that shithole and a half
Knew at once I wasn't getting much of the fatted calf
a solid bodied guitar saved me more than a time or two
I ducked a few beer bottles before my reputation grew

I had the licks that'd sting 'em
and I stung 'em over and over again
I made it through that chickenshack [naughty word removed]
almost to the promised land

I chiseled out a paying circuit
where my licks would wow the crowd
but I knew my days were numbered
though I never said that [naughty word removed] out loud

I'd stride in with my Les Paul into those shitholes and a half
Knew at once I wasn't gonna get much of the fatted calf
a solid bodied guitar saved me more than a time or two
I ducked a few beer bottles as my reputation grew

“I'm gonna cut you,” that's what that young guitar player said.
I did my best against him but that young boy cut me dead.

So I'm passin' the torch on to him
I hope his reign is long
But no guitar player's reign
is longer than the song.

Still I stride in with my Les Paul into those shitholes and a half
I know at once I'll never get much of the fatted calf
a solid bodied guitar still saves me a time or two
but nothing like those bottles as my reputation grew

I'll die playin' my Les Paul
if it all the same to you.

Guitars are like women. Players make love to them.

Hi smajor,

This is the first of yours I' ve had the chance to read. First, welcome to JPF's lyric board.

I don't know if you' re really a guitar player, but I'm a Strat guy myself, lol. Chevy vs Ford, huh? Don't get me wrong though, I love a good Paul. Always have!

Now that I've ran my mouth I'll get to your lyric.

In line 2 of verse one how about "I showed 'em my Bad Axe, puked twice,". Bad axe sounds a lot
like bad ass without saying as much. A little play on words.

In line 3 of verse two maybe tighten that up by saying, "and I stung 'em over and again".

In your bridge I would drop the "to him" at the end of line one. It reads smoother without it, and really isn't needed.

Is this metal? Just wondering about the genre. Great job if so!

David

Hey Smajor
A lyric most people will identify with(guitar players or not)and enjoyable read.

Cheers
Joe

Hi David,

I'm not a guitar player. I've tried, but never got too far.

I was watching a video on YouTube. Levon Helm was driving around showing a reporter all the bad ass joints he used to play in. The "show your razor, puke twice" quote came from him. As well as the usefulness of a solid body guitar.

The overall story is based on my reading over the years about the southern blues circuit.

I'm open to whatever works musicwise. I was thinking blues, but it wouldn't have to be.

Thanks joewatt

Hi Stan,

Cool write -- I really like the gritty feel!

One thing -- in the first verse, the "I's better than them" set me up to think that the grammar would be slang throughout. However, that wasn't the case. Some cursing occurred, but that still seemed unrelated to the slang grammar. I thought maybe change that one line, or add more slang grammar throughout. Just a thought!

Lisa

oh yeah,battle of the bands.Good write Stan.Mike

Thanks Lisa and Mike