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IRAN
by Fdemetrio - 04/15/26 12:27 PM
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PETE
by Fdemetrio - 04/14/26 06:57 AM
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Here's a cute, flirty little Christmas lyric:
UNWRAP ME
I’ve got a present for your eyes only
Meant to keep you from feeling lonely
Won’t be no Blue Christmas I guarantee
Under the mistletoe’s where I’ll be
Later when all the company has gone
We’ll turn out the lights, sit by the fire
And in the glow of the yuletide log
You’ll get ev’ry wish your heart desires
Chorus
Cos I ‘ve got something you can’t buy at the store
And Amazon can’t bring it to your door
Forget all the presents underneath the tree
I’m waiting for you to unwrap me
Bridge:
The night is ours and ours alone
And don’t plan on getting much sleep
What’s waiting for you is yours to keep
It’s so nice when you’re naughty with me
Chorus
Cos I ‘ve got something you can’t buy at the store
And Amazon can’t bring it to your door
Forget all the presents underneath the tree
I’m waiting for you to unwrap me
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A few Edits, and I think I'd Structure it like this;
Here's a cute, flirty little Christmas lyric:
"Unwrap Me" Copyright 12/6/25 by rpirone
(Verse I)
I’ve got a present for your eyes only,
meant to keep you from feeling lonely.
Won’t be no Blue Christmas I guarantee!
Under the mistletoe’s where I’ll be!
(Chorus) (Going to the Chorus here gets to the main idea early in the Song)
I‘ve got something, you can’t buy at the store!
Amazon can’t bring it, to your door!
Forget all the presents, underneath YOUR tree!
I’m waiting for you, to Unwrap Me!
(Verse II)
Later when all the company has gone,
we’ll turn out the lights, sit by the fire.
In the glow of the yuletide log,
you’ll get ev’ry wish, your heart desires!
(Chorus) (Second giving of Chorus, second 'hit' on THE Hook, the Title Line.)
I‘ve got something, you can’t buy at the store!
Amazon can’t bring it, to your door!
Forget all the presents, underneath YOUR tree!
I’m waiting for you, to Unwrap Me!
(Having heard the Melody of the Verse twice, the Melody of the Chorus twice, the listener's interest is renewed with the variant Melody of the Bridge. The naughty/nice reference (S.C. Is Coming To Town) is 'pivotal' in suggesting the 'Unwrap' concept, just what a Bridge Lyric should do.)
(Bridge)
The night is ours, and ours alone!
Don’t plan on getting much sleep!
What’s waiting for you is yours to keep!
It’s so nice when you’re naughty with me!
(Chorus) (Third 'hit' on THE Hook)
I‘ve got something, you can’t buy at the store!
Amazon can’t bring it, to your door!
Forget all the presents, underneath YOUR tree!
I’m waiting for you, to Unwrap Me!
(Coda) (Fourth and Fifth 'hits' on The Hook)
I’m waiting for you, to Unwrap Me!
I’m waiting for you, to Unwrap Me!
Last edited by Gary E. Andrews; 12/10/25 07:45 PM.
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I agree with Gary his arrangement would be best.
Best to you
Tex
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Very cute lyrics... enjoyed!
"It Mattered to THAT One"
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Here you go, I took Gary's suggestion and added an intro (When are you) run it through Suno this is what I come up with. Don't know what you might have had in mind. Maybe you'll like it. Hope you had a Merry Christmas. https://suno.com/s/NdrZzugIsnB1y0Vs
Last edited by texritter; 12/26/25 03:16 AM.
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Great treatment of the lyric. Pretty much the approach I was looking for. Thanks for taking the time to do this. All the best to you and yours.
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Great treatment of the lyric. Pretty much the approach I was looking for. Thanks for taking the time to do this. All the best to you and yours. My Pleasure, I kinda wanted a little more gingal bells to it, but I think there is just enough to make it a Christmas song.
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