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Wheels On Water
it was a hydroplane rain
wheels on water
there I was
playing God again
wheels on water
three for a quarter
the devils daughter
and I
fast cars faster women
leaving rubber
skid marks, mark time
boy was I movin'
spirits cloud my memory
a puff of smoke
a trail of dust
blinding extra-sensory
it was a hydroplane rain
wheels on water
there I was
playing God again
wheels on water
three for a quarter
the devils daughter
and I
sensual anger
biological entanglements
a soft place to crash
star spangled banners
a death defying pace
a race to nowhere
history can't erase
I had been there
it was a hydroplane rain
wheels on water
there I was
playing God again
wheels on water
three for a quarter
the devils daughter
and I
those who have lived, wonder how
they managed to make it, to the here and now
© 2007 by rittman
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reads like a ritt/springsteen collab! I think you know springsteen is my favorite  . Pretty cool! I wanted to rhyme anger with banner though..before I read the line it ended up being, banner was in my head for the rhyme. I realize that means changing lines in that verse..but FYI! I watched a show not too long ago about an aircraft Russia designed(the Hydroplane) that flew right above the water...I know you're talking about shuttling people around the streets of New York in a car but it did remind me of that hydroplane for a split second! Interesting lyric! Good Day! L
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sensual anger
biological entanglements
a soft place to crash
star spangled banners
Hi Linda
just had to look at it in print, I like it thanks!!!
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hey mikey he likes it!
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Hey Ritt
I got out of breath readin this one....It is so, particularly your fast apple driving style....cool stuff!
Eric
If you're going to judge someone, do it on the side of mercy.
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Hey great white bear of the northlands!
Great to hear from you!!!
Thanks
and play some guitar for us....k?!
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Hi Ritt,
Looks like a good one for you to do yourself in a Dylan
talking rap style.
TT
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Thanks TT
I snipped the record wire on my headphones, may one day reattach, but for now I'll consider the sanity of others, or is that the sanctity of marriage...LOL.
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Ritt, this is awesome. It's also written in Calvinesque style. Did you realize that?
sensual LONGING
OUR HANDS ON THE WHEEL STRONGLY
a soft place to LAND
WHERE LOVERS BELONG
Personally, I don't think road rage belongs in this piece.
"Grits is one of those country-boy words that is both singular and plural-like deer, elk and sheep. I think the singular is appropriate when there's a modifier that makes it clear one is talking about something specific. Like, 'Grits are good for you, but these here grits is tasty.'"~~Joe Wrabek
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Thanks Tricia
Calvinesque? hmmm now the poor boys temperature is going to rise!
Though the road is a focal point, it's not really about the road at all...(mispent youth)...
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Hi Ritt, Good stuff here... it was a hydroplane rain wheels on water there I was playing God again also this... a death defying pace a race to nowhere history can't erase I had been there Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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I'm having a moment...
three for a quarter
the devils daughter
and I
What does this mean?
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Hey Ritt,
Cool one! (though, like Shayne, I'm having a moment about that one too!) Enquiring minds want to know...:) "biological entanglements" -- great phrase!
Lisa
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Hi Ritt,
Yeah, sounds like a fast paced melody too. I'm not a fan of rap but looks like it could be "rapped" all right
I took the "devil's daughter thing to kinda' mean like the "dancing with the Devil" thing, which I take to mean kinda' flirting with disaster.
Kinda' outa' my territory but this V---
fast cars faster women
leaving rubber
skid marks, mark time
boy was I movin'
The women-movin' rhyme would be a pretty good stretch, even for a stretcher like me. Couldja' maybe get "swimmin' in, in place of movin' some way?
Mostly flows right along, fast like
Wy
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Thanks Calvin
Glad you enjoyed!
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Ritt,
You do with words what Helen does to my heart...wrap yourself around them and make them special. I kinda hear this one as Dylan doing rap...now that's something to ponder!
Alan
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Ok skipping to Wy, as he explained the confusing lines quite well, thanks, Strangely some words are quite regional in their pronounciation, over in these parts, women and swimmin' don't even remotely rhyme...thanks again!
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I understood that too about the devil's daughter, but what's the three for a quarter about??
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ok Lisa, here goes
A carnival barker would shout three for a quarter, for a game of chance that was nearly impossible to win, thus the cheap entry price into the game. One such game was trying to pitch dimes and get them to stick onto floating coffee holder sized plates in a man made wavey pond. It looked so easy, but alas it wasn't...
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I love your whimsical way Ritt! Take Care, L
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Oh. I get it now. Egg on face!
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neigh, no egg on Lisa's face, I won't allow it, not today, not anyday, ok don't to that...wow a sextuplet of double negatives...!
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