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JPF is Back
by John Lawrence Schick - 07/30/26 06:35 PM
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by Gary E. Andrews - 07/24/26 08:58 PM
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Hi..this is a demo I had done by Denny Martin. Demo Vocals, Paul Scott. I Hope you like but IF you don't...I really hope you tell me that too. Thanks Mike Dunbar for the ING nudge on overshadow...and ..and those who reviewed this for me..... He Saw Past Calvary http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=8404&content=musicHe Saw Past Calvary Kaley Willow ©2008 How Jesus suffered....... And tearfully prayed In a garden of darkness Where...he...was...betrayed Spit on and beaten Mocked with a crown of shame All while a world of sin Weighed down on Him Our Lord endured...for...there..was..no..other way.. He saw past........Calvary He saw past...tomorrow The victory was His to win Overshadowing sorrow He looked beyond agony On through eternity For every man..woman..and child He saw past Calvary Accused...then convicted A lamb without plea His only thought.....was forgive them For ..they...just..do..not...see And though He was innocent The crowd cried....Cru..ci..fy He gave His perfect life As sacrifice Al...le..leu...iah.. Praise..His...holy...name For He saw past........Calvary He saw past...tomorrow The victory was His to win Overshadowing sorrow He looked beyond agony On through eternity For every man..woman..and child He saw past Calvary Past Calvary Past Calvary He saw past........Calvary He saw past...tomorrow The victory was His to win Overshadowing sorrow He looked beyond agony On through eternity For every man..woman..and child He saw past Calvary Jesus saw past Calvary........ He Saw Past Calvary http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=8404&content=musicChildren's Music http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=6469&content=musicWyman and Kaley's Andy & Friends CD http://cdbaby.com/cd/kwwg
Last edited by Kaley Willow; 03/19/08 05:00 PM.
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Oh my Kaley,
This is stunning!!! I love it. Outstanding blend of music and lyric. Denny and Paul did a beautiful job on the demo. I especially love the chorus. The flow there is lovely!!
Hugs,
Bobbie
They'll tell you success in the music biz is all about who you know...but the truth is...it's about who knows you. Gallup 'n Dawg Music
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Thank you so much for sharing this. The lyrics, melody, vocals, and production are perfect! The message is beautifully written and Paul's delivery is more than commendable. Denny did an outstanding job as he so often does. How nice to present this with Good Friday right around the corner. Kaley it is wonderful!!!!!  Best, Lynn
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Kaley,
Very, VERY nice! I would make two suggestions (without listening)
1: "Overshadowing (HIS or our) sorrow"
2: "He looked beyond agony
Beyond our sinful history" (since "eternity" is unending this
will cause a mental conflict for some of the more carnal
listeners) This line gives detractors an oxymoron to point out
in our "foolish, superstitious" beliefs if you get my drift.
This is a beautifully written lyric.
Wayne
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All round fantastic, I am sitting here listening to it, you all have done yourselves very proud. Keep up the good work! Denny, Paul Wow!  You have touched me. It is wonderful to be sitting here listening to Calvary! Kaley, you are A BEAUTIFUL FLOWER! "PERFECT" I could listen to it all day! Michele Aussie girl from down under
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Hi Kaley, Very beautifully done. On all accounts..... Thanks for sharing this with us. Kristi
A musician must make music, an artist must paint, a poet must write,
if he is to be ultimately at peace with himself. What a man can be,
he must be. -- Abraham Maslow, American Psychologist
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Kaley,
This is quite beautiful. Wonderful job by everyone! My only thought is that you could have used Christ to rhyme with sacrifice in 2nd part of the 2nd verse.
And though He was innocent
The crowd cried....Cru..ci..fy
He gave His perfect life
As sacrifice
Al...le..leu...iah.. For he is the Christ!
Just a thought. It's quite lovely as is.
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Thank you Wayne....I'm really glad you liked this...and thanks for reviewing the lyric.!!....and giving me your thoughts... THANKs!!! When the demo was done..., this line..was changed a bit.... Overshadowing sorrow ....to smooth the line..as it was sung by the vocalist. But I don't think leaving it open to interpretation...hurts there..(jmo....) .... Ok..following you on your thought process ....on sinful history, Wayne and understand your reasoning....... Thanks for your suggestions!!!..and for thinking it through.... very best to you this afternoon Kaley He Saw Past Calvary http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=8404&content=musicChildren's Songs http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=6469&content=musicWyman and Kaley's Andy & Friends CD http://cdbaby.com/cd/kwwg
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Goodness, Kaley, this is magnificent. Kudos girl. This is truly something special.
"Grits is one of those country-boy words that is both singular and plural-like deer, elk and sheep. I think the singular is appropriate when there's a modifier that makes it clear one is talking about something specific. Like, 'Grits are good for you, but these here grits is tasty.'"~~Joe Wrabek
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Kristi!!...Thank you... I'm really glad you thought so.... I don't say this phrase lightly or often...but ...I just "held" the pen and sat at the piano...for this. It was one of my my easiest songs to write. thank you very much....Kristi hugs... Kaley
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Hi Kaley,
other people have already told you so, but I also think you've done a great job with this song. Kudos.
Best,
Yann
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I am getting chills as I listen to this KK. Very, very moving. Great depth. The demo is beautiful and radio ready too. VERY IMPRESSED.
HAPPY BIRTHDAY, KK.
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Ya know what Wendy...Till you mentioned it the other day..., I did not see that I was inconsistent in the rhyme scheme... thank you for pointing that out, gal ...... ... and think your offering there is quite good!!!..... I do have the music track...should I do this over again..... I'd give that some thought...but I'm also wondering...if I'd do that...hmmm...I guess I'd break the rhyme scheme either way? because...I'd have 4 I's in a row?...... Thanks Wendy for thinking! and for catching that.......... I appreciate you pointing it out......... very best to you.... Kaley.. He Saw Past Calvary http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=8404&content=musicChildren's Songs http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=6469&content=musicWyman and Kaley's Andy & Friends CD http://cdbaby.com/cd/kwwg
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Hi KK and everybody
Kaley said she got locked out this afternoon, but should get on Sunday morning.
Good job all around.
Somebody already mentioned the rhyme scheme. I don't know how big a drawback that is
Looks like it should be about good to go.
Birthday? Did somebody say birthday? Mine got farther than I could count so I just quit countin'.Pretty sure I was born though. KK should be just nicely dry behind the ears.
Anyway, happy birthday Kaley.
Wy
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Is it your birthday, TOO? Happy Birthday!!!!!
"Grits is one of those country-boy words that is both singular and plural-like deer, elk and sheep. I think the singular is appropriate when there's a modifier that makes it clear one is talking about something specific. Like, 'Grits are good for you, but these here grits is tasty.'"~~Joe Wrabek
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Hi Kaley,
In a word, OUTSTANDING!!! It builds where it should, and eases where it should. Everyone did a super job on this. You should be very proud.
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Well Happy Belated Birthdays folks!
Kaley, lovely song for a beautiful Easter day here in Tennessee.
You've got to know your limitations. I don't know what your limitations are. I found out what mine were when I was twelve. I found out that there weren't too many limitations, if I did it my way. -Johnny Cash It's only music. -niteshift Mike Dunbar Music
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Kaley, I haven't been around much, but am so glad I got a chance to hear this. And on Easter!! Just lovely!!
And Happy Belated!!!
Diane
Diane Ewing
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If I missed your birthday,
I just didn't know,
I'm sending good wishes,
A little late though.
I hope it was happy,
That skies wore their blue,
That smiles were plenty,
That all dreams came true!!! happy belated birthday Kaley!!!
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P.S. I am still listening to your song and Paul's voice and loving both. I hope you post this over on the MP3 board so those that don't visit here will get the chance to hear it.
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