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Lot Long
by Gary E. Andrews - 11/10/26 11:20 AM
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Here is one called Take You Home. I guess it sounds kinda country, but I am not sure about a genre, if it matters. I am looking for feedback! Thanks for checking it out. Take You Home Take You Home Copyright © 2008 Colin Ward V1 On a long and empty train bound for Tampa An eerie brooding fog filled the air, I put my northern clothes in my suitcase & I tried to think of ways to make you care Ch Take you home with me, Gonna take you home with me Take you back to Richmond, That's our home V2 I saw those Georgia pines sliding by me, Florida sand and sun can't be far, The factories and the marshes of Savannah, Gave way to grand hotels and tiki bars Ch Take you home with me, Gonna take you home with me Take you back to Richmond, That's our home Br I hear you're pouring beers for wayward tourists, Making fancy tips for half the year, I'm planning to catch up with you in Gulfport, Making my intentions truly clear Ch Take you home with me, Gonna take you home with me Take you back to Richmond, That's our home V3 Well I know you fell in love with sandy beaches & I know you like the sunshine every day, I know that you love the balmy weather, Maybe I should join you here and stay Ch 2 I'll stay here with you, I'll stay here with you, I'll stay here in Gulfport, Call it home
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I thought the short 5 second intro was perfect. I actually had to re-wind and just listen to those 5 seconds a couple of times. Nice lyrical song that has a real good overall feel to it. The electric guitar work during the singing is very well done.
Very nice acoustic guitar solo. Pretty good story, too.
Kevin
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Nice one Colin. Could be Country, could be folk/rock or whatever. Could be done in about any genre I guess. Nice production. The lead guitar is effective being laid back like it is.
Steve
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Hi Colin,
I liked the overall feel of this one, but I'm geographically confused. You're on a train to Tampa to find your woman and take her back home to Richmond, VA. You go through Georgia, planning to catch her in Gulfport, MS. Isn't that the other way? Then you're in Gulfport and plan to stay there with her. Now, somehow the title, Take You Home, isn't as effective. Am I missing something?
Ricki
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Ricki,
That would be Gulfport, Florida!
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Kevin and Steve,
Thanks for the comments. Guess it's country with a couple of Stax guitar licks!
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I like this a lot - especially the guitar solo (it's SO sweet and tasteful). All around fine tune - not sure how to pigeonhole it into a genre, could fit into several.
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Hey Colin: Liked this - very cool backing track. Simple, effective chorus too. Only thing I'd consider is maybe changing to another place than Gulfport. I think most people outside of Florida would think like Rikki.... Maybe make it a more touristy place? Well, on the other hand, you DID say WAYWARD tourists...  Scott
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Colin,
Very nice. I'm not sure what it is, some kind of hybrid between Folk, Country, and Americana, I think. I don't know why, but initially as I was listening and reading, I thought perhaps the singer was taking a body home to be buried. That would make for an interesting twist, I suppose. I liked the images of Georgia and Florida going by outside the window on the train in your lyric. Guitar solo was nice too.
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Clint, Thanks for the compliment. I have decided it doesn't matter what pigeon hole it fits in. I don't understand the need for 58 genres on Soundclick and Ourstage anyway!
Ricki, Come on say it!
Scott, Understand about Gulfport. I thought about Apalachicola and Opa Locka! I'll work on a good two syllable tourist town. Lakeland?
Wendy, No everyone is alive and kickin' in this song. Thanks for listening.
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Hi Colin! I really like this! Americana ... lol! Thats where I slip all my songs in these days .. a little bit o this and a little bit o that! The only comment I have is that I don't want you to confuse your hook with the last line ... I think you'd be best to end your chorus with the hook as well... something like... Ch Take you home with me, Gonna take you home with me OUR HOME IS BACK IN Richmond, GONNA TAKE YOU HOME HOME just a thought ... my humble opinion  very nice song. Joanne
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Joanne,
Americana it is!
I like your suggestion......I will give that a try!
Colin
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