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Title: Flip Flops & A Rose Tattoo (c) All Rights Reserved, 04/23/2010 Fran Williams Flip Flops & A Rose Tattoo V1) Still love those warm summer breezes Tides wash away, the message to you Running on the white sandy beaches My girl with flip flops & rose tattoo V2) Kids playing ball in the warm sunshine Grab a sandwich & a can of- Soda Pop Bait fishing hooks & cast out my line Hoping, fun in the sun will never stop Lift) Memories always take me back in time Sun burned babe in her string bikini and her rose tattoo & sun tanned line Chorus) Wonderful times we all shared at the beach Special treasures & memories on the sand The salty breezes blowing through your hair We're still, in love as we walk hand in hand V3) Scuba diving, for treasure on the reefs Sea shells, and red coral for a necklace Looking, at my girl's rose tattoo & bikini When I was so young & just crazy reckless Repeat Chorus)2X's Tag) After all these years, you are still- beautiful Standing there in your flip flops & rose tattoo PS, All constructive suggestions will be appreciated.. Would like to develop this with an island music sound. Bikini Babe, Fran Williams 
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Hi Bikini Babe, I am in an island music band so this is kinda down my alley. A few lyrical suggestions to make it more interesting below..... Title: Flip Flops & A Rose Tattoo
(c) All Rights Reserved, 04/23/2010
Fran Williams
Flip Flops & A Rose Tattoo
V1)
Still love those warm summer breezes
Tides wash away, my message to you
Running slow on the white sandy beaches
My girl with flip flops & a rose tattoo
V2)
Kids playing ball in the vivid sunshine
Conch salad & a can of- Soda Pop
Bait three hooks & cast out my line
Hoping, fun in the sun will never stop
Lift)
Memories of my favorite time
Her string bikini helped us both unwind
and Her rose tattoo & tiny tan lines
Chorus)
Amazing times we all shared at the beach
Special Treasures & memories on the sand
The salty breezes blowing through our hair
We're still, in love as we walk hand in hand
V3)
Scuba diving, for treasure on the reefs
Sea shells, and red coral for a necklace
Looking, at my girl's rose tattoo & bikini
When I was so young & just crazy reckless
Repeat Chorus)2X's
Tag)
After all these years, you are still- beautiful
Standing there in your flip flops & rose tattoo
PS, All constructive suggestions will be appreciated..
Would like to develop this with an island music sound.
Bikini Babe,
Fran Williams
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Hi Bikini Babe, I am in an island music band so this is kinda down my alley. A few lyrical suggestions to make it more interesting below..... Title: Flip Flops & A Rose Tattoo
(c) All Rights Reserved, 04/23/2010
Fran Williams
Flip Flops & A Rose Tattoo
V1)
Still love those warm summer breezes
Tides wash away, my message to you
Running slow on the white sandy beaches
My girl with flip flops & a rose tattoo
V2)
Kids playing ball in the vivid sunshine
Conch salad & a can of- Soda Pop
Bait three hooks & cast out my line
Hoping, fun in the sun will never stop
Lift)
Memories of my favorite time
Her string bikini helped us both unwind
and Her rose tattoo & tiny tan lines
Chorus)
Amazing times we all shared at the beach
Special Treasures & memories on the sand
The salty breezes blowing through our hair
We're still, in love as we walk hand in hand
V3)
Scuba diving, for treasure on the reefs
Sea shells, and red coral for a necklace
Looking, at my girl's rose tattoo & bikini
When I was so young & just crazy reckless
Repeat Chorus)2X's
Tag)
After all these years, you are still- beautiful
Standing there in your flip flops & rose tattoo
PS, All constructive suggestions will be appreciated..
Would like to develop this with an island music sound.
Bikini Babe,
Fran Williams Hi Colin, Wow, I just listened to some of your Beer Club Music.. You got it going, on man..It's like ya got inside my head with the beats. I love the Jimmy Buffet sounds.. Most of your songs, Like "Move on Alone", has the melody flavor,& singing, I hear for my lyrics, yeah! I posted another song on JPF called, "Ponytails & Cut Off Jeans". It also has a day at the beach flavor & style. I also have another song, not posted here yet, called "Join The Club" PS, If you become inspired enough and want to put this lyric to music, just change it up, anyway you need to and give me credit for my lyrics. Would love to hear it. Bikini Babe, Fran Williams
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Fran--
I'm with COLIN --great suggestions--
A GOOD START ON THIS ISLAND SONG--I love them too!
Mackie
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Fran--
I'm with COLIN --great suggestions--
A GOOD START ON THIS ISLAND SONG--I love them too!
Mackie Hi Mackie, thank you for the comments. I agree, that island music has an upbeat nostalgic sound. Colin is very talented..wow!! You are also very talented and I hope you feel better soon. Bikini Babe, Fran Williams
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Hi Bikini Babe,
I like the beachy feel of your lyric and it has a lot of rhythm. The only thing I would add would be naming the beach. To make it be more personal.
Jacqueline Richter
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Hi Bikini Babe,
I like the beachy feel of your lyric and it has a lot of rhythm. The only thing I would add would be naming the beach. To make it be more personal. Hi Jackie, First welcome to JPF. I look forward to seeing your work. Thank you for the valuable suggestions, and I believe that naming a well known beach would help the lyrics. How about, all the white sandy beaches of the Gulf Coast. Jimmy Buffet gives concerts there a lot at Orange Beach..The sand looks like Sugar..Also the great beaches of Panama City, Fl. It is famous for all of the spring-breaks..Beautiful, area.. Bikini Babe, Fran Williams
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Hey Fran,
Colin made some great suggestions. My only other nit is that the title is not in the chorus.
“I usually start with a title or maybe a little rhyme or phrase.” - Harlan Howard
Co-writing = Compromise!
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Hey Fran,
Colin made some great suggestions. My only other nit is that the title is not in the chorus. Hi Shayne, thank you for commenting. That is a very good suggestion. It will help to bring it..Thanks! Bikini Babe, turns into "Sunburn-girl"  ouch! Fran Williams
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I'm not sure why women want tattoos. But I see them everywhere. I don't get it.
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I'm not sure why women want tattoos. But I see them everywhere. I don't get it. Hi Jim, thank you for comments. I believe it is part of the new generation. Men in the military use to get their mans, man tattoo's. Usually it was a girlfriend's name or the flag. The women who get tattoo's is their way of showing independence. My little tattoo is a unique birthmark. yup!.looks like a rose..Only a very select few has ever seen it.. PS, Ya been lookin' at them there girls tattoo's, Bikini Babe, Fran Williams
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This song can be accomplished put to the right beat. An update on some of the Beach Boys classics by chance?
Peace,
Brian
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This song can be accomplished put to the right beat. An update on some of the Beach Boys classics by chance?
Peace,
Brian Hi Brian, thank you for the comments. I can just picture a sunny day beach scene, pink pelicans strutting around, some pictures of beautiful bikini clad girls and a guy getting eye strain..This would be a classic Jimmy Buffet day at the beach! I also have several Beach Boys songs. Not sure, if any music will ever be developed for the lyrics, but I hope so.. Bikini Babe, Fran Williams
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If you are going to get the music set, now would be the time to do it before the prime beach season sets in. We are really getting an unusual early taste of said weather here in the the Midwest right now. Reached 80 degrees the last two days, the earliest such combo in history here.
Peace,
Brian
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Hi Folks, I have had many awesome suggestions for this
lyric and still don't have a Singer/Musician to develop the
music. I believe it would be a fun song to hear and see
a music video. It would be a 50/50 Co-Write.
Bikini Babe,
Fran Williams
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Before I throw this hatchet away...I'm becoming a serial Song-Hacker!
When each Verse ends with the title Line I call it a Refrain-Type Chorus. I think this works that way. You could have a Lyrical Bridge after Verse II. it would have to be brief and Lyrically significant. I think an Instrumental Bridge could work too, letting that island/beach music have nice little run. Simplify. Simplify.
Title: Flip Flops & A Rose Tattoo
(c) All Rights Reserved, 04/23/2010
Fran Williams
Flip Flops & A Rose Tattoo
VI)
It was one of those days with warm summer breezes
I let the waves wash away my message to you
I first saw you walking on sugar sand beaches (You cain't run in flip-flops!)
My girl with Flip Flops And A Rose Tattoo (Repeat?)
VII)
Remember how it got too hot to stay out there
The sea got so rough it beat us both black and blue
I took you to lunch. We fell asleep in beach chairs
My girl with Flip Flops And A Rose Tattoo.
(Instrumental Bridge)
VIII) (I think the change in Rhyme-Scheme can still work, finishing up.)
Down through the years I know we've both changed a little
We play on the beach to stay fit as a fiddle
It didn't take me all day to fall in love with you
My girl with Flip Flops And A Rose Tattoo.
Coda)
(All music stops. Singer-Character's voice, solo)
After all these years, you're still pretty as the Moon
(Music kicks back in to finish, repeat THE Hook/title however long time constraints allow.)
My girl with Flip Flops And A Rose Tattoo
There will always be another song to be written. Someone will write it. Why not you? www.garyeandrews.com
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Hi Gary, thank you for your advice. It is always appreciated Fran
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Great song Fran.
Hope you get some help developing it and we get to see a finished product. Do like Colins suggestions. Will be keeping an eye on this one.
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