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by Gary E. Andrews - 07/24/26 08:58 PM
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Been away for awhile. Back now.  Here's a lyric I just started working on. V1 I want to get some crack Yeah find it in that wall What surrounds your heart surrounded mine too Now I want my love to slip through Yeah we've both been cut In a place you can't touch Want so much to heal it But all you can do is to feel it Ch ?
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The first 2 lines confuse me, A crack in the wall or crack as a substance? You might consider changing it to something like
I hope there is a crack,
In your heart's wall
Hoping I can get through the lining
And let my love reach out to you
Just a thought.
Pat Spencer
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HI Drifter,
Just some thoughts on a possible C or elsewhere and probably the hook at the end again but
KOS
Just a little crack
A crack in your heart
That's all I ask
A little place to start
I'll pour love in
Then I'll pour again
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Crack kills!
I'm gonna come back tomorrow and see what I think. But honestly, crack kills!
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The first 2 lines confuse me, A crack in the wall or crack as a substance? You might consider changing it to something like
I hope there is a crack,
In your heart's wall
Hoping I can get through the lining
And let my love reach out to you
Just a thought. Hey, Pat! Thanks for your cooments and sugs! Sorry the first two lines are confusing to you but that's the purpose -- to get people thinking.
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HI Drifter,
Just some thoughts on a possible C or elsewhere and probably the hook at the end again but
KOS
Just a little crack
A crack in your heart
That's all I ask
A little place to start
I'll pour love in
Then I'll pour again
Hey, WY! Thanks for your input -- definitely good sugs and worth contemplation.
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Crack kills!
I'm gonna come back tomorrow and see what I think. But honestly, crack kills! Hey, Caroline! I'm aware that crack kills and am in no way suggesting otherwise. The purpose of the first line is to pique listeners interest -- to draw them in, get them thinking. I'd also like to point out here (and not just to you), that the structure of the lyrical lines support the melody perfectly. Thanks for the visit. Hope you have a wonderful day!
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