Aaron,

You may fall behind now and then, but you're here at number eleven! I'm noticing the way you approach writing is to pack a lot of words into your lines, you always have nice melodies and great outlines of characters, but sometimes the fact that there are so many words can hamper your potential vocal delivery. In other words, with so many things to spit out, it can feel like stumbling here and there, not being confident on where to place your pauses ect.

I think most of the ironing something like that out will come with time, just noticing.....though an OVER economy of words can have the opposite effect too.....(drawing out words too long ect).

I'm starting to hear a Harry Chapin-esque style take hold in a lot of your stuff, that is...songs like mini novels....and that's good (IMHO), that seems to be missing these days, but conversely...it's difficult to do.

on another note, I wanted/expected the bridge to roll longer, maybe double what it is.

All that mumbo jumbo having been said, you done good, and it's on to number 12.

Upon hearing 11 new songs from you, I'm curious......who would be your top five favorite song writers be? Just curious about your influences.

smile

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