Mr. Nelson, and I do mean Mister, a well deserved title when you write like this. I loved this song--I can handle the length and have been known to do the same with a few songs. I do try and have a shorter version ready--and in fact am working on that same scenario myself.

I do think personally, IMO, that if you inserted a short digressing bridge after 2nd chorus in place of vs. 4--you would bring in a slight change of pace which would offer a nice break with the slower tempo song and also gives the impression of having a song "feel" a bit shorter.

I have to say, though, this is a real "sweet" write--I always enjoy your unique vocals as well!

steady-eddie.