Hi Jimmy.
I think you got something worth working on. Maybe change some of the melody so it doesn't sound too much like "turn the page".
Also, you could try some different effects on your vocal to match the ones on the instruments.
At the moment it sounds like you're singing in a different space to them.
Maybe add a bit of compression on the whole of it.
It all needs bringing together, production wise.
As a song though, I like it a lot.

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