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Lot Long
by Gary E. Andrews - 11/10/26 11:20 AM
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Joined: Jan 2004
Posts: 465
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Sonny, Daddy always said "if it aint broke, don't fix it. So I wont try to fix it. Just put a little polish on it (one mans polish may be another mans tarnish) This is your song and you know more about how you want it than me. I'll just point out below the things that caught my eye. I only made some slight elaborations on the fine lyrics that were already there. As I read through it several times I realized I was mistaken about the “near rhyme” remark, I apologize. Only in V1 Line 2 did I change the rhyme to more “perfect rhyme” to go with verse 4. I know that every writer writes different, if that werent the case, it would get boring pretty quick. Heck, I go back and change my lyrics all the time cause I always see something I coud have done to make it better to my own ears. So with all apologies out of the way, go ahead and see what you think.
Our Moment In Time
© 2002 Sonny Green
(V)
I lived a life of loneliness
In a blinding, pouring rain
My heart had turned as cold as stone
Lost in darkness, filled with pain
But the first time I held you close
I knew the time had come
You loved away my deepest fears
As two hearts became one
I took a little more liberty with this verse than I first intended, sorry I can’t help myself sometimes.walls of stone sounds just a good as cold as stone, depends on what you want.
(CH)
This is our moment in time
You're the girl I'm meant to find
Love's brought us together
To live as one forever
I'll love you all my life
This is our moment in time
(V)
I'll never forget the first time
That I saw your sparkling eyes
Your love consumed my very soul
As you held your hand in mine
The sunset slowly slipped away
We danced beneath the crecent moon
I knew that with my every breath
That I would always love you
(I elaborated a little in line 3 & 6, did a little switch-a-ru in line 7
(CH)
This is our moment in time
You're the girl I'm meant to find
Love's brought us together
To live as one forever
I'll love you all my life
This is our moment in time
(Tag)
Darlin', I'm so glad you're mine
This is our moment in time
[This message has been edited by palidin (edited 09-26-2004).]
Robert
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