Before I throw this hatchet away...I'm becoming a serial Song-Hacker!

When each Verse ends with the title Line I call it a Refrain-Type Chorus. I think this works that way. You could have a Lyrical Bridge after Verse II. it would have to be brief and Lyrically significant. I think an Instrumental Bridge could work too, letting that island/beach music have nice little run. Simplify. Simplify.

Title: Flip Flops & A Rose Tattoo
(c) All Rights Reserved, 04/23/2010
Fran Williams

Flip Flops & A Rose Tattoo

VI)
It was one of those days with warm summer breezes
I let the waves wash away my message to you
I first saw you walking on sugar sand beaches (You cain't run in flip-flops!)
My girl with Flip Flops And A Rose Tattoo (Repeat?)

VII)
Remember how it got too hot to stay out there
The sea got so rough it beat us both black and blue
I took you to lunch. We fell asleep in beach chairs
My girl with Flip Flops And A Rose Tattoo.

(Instrumental Bridge)

VIII) (I think the change in Rhyme-Scheme can still work, finishing up.)
Down through the years I know we've both changed a little
We play on the beach to stay fit as a fiddle
It didn't take me all day to fall in love with you
My girl with Flip Flops And A Rose Tattoo.

Coda)
(All music stops. Singer-Character's voice, solo)
After all these years, you're still pretty as the Moon
(Music kicks back in to finish, repeat THE Hook/title however long time constraints allow.)
My girl with Flip Flops And A Rose Tattoo

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