Originally Posted by Jackie444
Hi Bikini Babe,


I like the beachy feel of your lyric and it has a lot of rhythm. The only thing I would add would be naming the beach. To make it be more personal.


Hi Jackie,
First welcome to JPF. I look forward to seeing your
work. Thank you for the valuable suggestions, and I
believe that naming a well known beach would help the
lyrics. How about, all the white sandy beaches of the
Gulf Coast. Jimmy Buffet gives concerts there a lot at
Orange Beach..The sand looks like Sugar..Also the great
beaches of Panama City, Fl. It is famous for all of the
spring-breaks..Beautiful, area..

Bikini Babe,
Fran Williams


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