Hi Diane,

Forgot to tell you how great this is!
To tell you the truth, I was in a rush and kind of got hung up around "Rolled around" when I thought waves would roll "through".

Then I started monkeying around too much. . . Everybody plays the fool sometimes. . . [Linked Image] sorry.
I confess, I hadn't read the whole song through first. I sometimes critique that way to avoid distraction but that approach only works sometimes.

Verse 3

As if the sky resembled melted gold
Instead of leaden wet December cold
As if outside your door were meadowed hills
Velvet-floored and blossom-filled

LOVE THIS VERSE! ( Line one could be less pedestrian "resembled")

Verse 4

As if the world was spinning on your hand
And you could stop it anywhere you planned
And each unmeasured drop of morning dew
Held hidden treasure just for you

BEAUTIFUL!

Chorus

Open up girl, unlock your mind
Explore the wonder of all you find
The key to the door is in your soul
The keeper of secrets can make you whole

KILLER! Especially last line!

Line 3 . . . Needs to be stronger I think.

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TallT

[This message has been edited by Tall_Terry (edited 12-23-2004).]