Howdy Buzz,

I think your basic hook is awesome but the arrangement of the thoughts and rhymes in the verses did present a perplexing situation for me too. I spent a bit of time with it, trying to see outside the box you had painted yourself into. Here are some observations. When you are struggling with a particular rhyme, it often works to switch the lines around and use a different thought for the rhyme. You are right in thinking that you are quite limted with rhymes for girl. So in this case I tried to used a different thought for the rhyming line. Did some extensive overhaul here but see if any of these thoughts can get you a new perspective to work with.

When you both like THE SAME girl
Does your friend always win
Does he have the cosmetic appeal
That makes you envious OF HIM
NEW VERSE II
When you both, join the crowd
Do the women all check him out
You CLEAN UP GOOD but what the heck
IT LEAVES YOU IN NO DOUBT

CHORUS
You need an Ugly Friend
That’s the only way to win (drop always)
You need an Ugly Friend
So they’ll look at you
Instead of him

WHEN YOU WANNA GO CHASIN’ PRETTY girls
DON’T INVITE HIM TO GO ALONG WITH YOU
Cause YOU KNOW THAT IF HE GOES
You’ll just be SINGIN’ THOSE UGLY FRIEND BLUES
BRIDGE
Now I know this doesn’t sound MUCH like
A friendship that’ll be true
But why the hell, do you think
Your friend hangs around with you

The core concept of this is so good you need to keep after this till it sparkles.

Good luck,
Bobbie

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