Hello!
First, I'd like to state that the concept of "Even the Candles Cried" is one I find to be a very hard-hitting emotional statement. Second, there is an inherent magic in this song, but I feel it needs a small bit of flushing out.

Here are my thoughts, which are given out of respect for the strength of this song and a sincere wish to see it reach its intended place.

I wish the hook didn't change lyrically from the first time to the following times. For me, I wish the lyrics would stay the same but the meaning would change when you apply the words to a husband and then to Jesus. In this way, you keep the hook the hook, but you still get the strong message across. In both instances, you are speaking about a "he" so it should be relatively simple to do this type of "double meaning" hook. (I would actually have the same lyrical hook apply to all three different verses. It would be very cool to develop the song where she gives birth to a baby boy and "even the candles cried" could somehow refer to the candles on his birthday cake, but this time for joy. It would take the journey full circle. But, that's just how I think, and it wouldn't necessarily change the impact of your song. I just love the premise and got excited. You really have something here.)

There are only a few, other minor things that I, personally, would tweak, but I'm not a hit country songwriter yet....so please accept my critique knowing how strong I feel this song is and how I feel it to be a true contender in Nashville.

Heidi

Last edited by Thompson; 05/16/07 02:54 PM.
"And, in the end, the love you take is equal to the love you make." Paul McCartney