Indigo:

Welcome!

I really enjoyed your song. I thought music was very strong. I'm not too familiar with this style of music, but I thought the music was both catchy and compelling. It has a great groove! I liked these lines:

To look beyond the skin I'm in,
And to truly help me breath again.

and

He's one of my favorites,
Ooh how I Savor this

I didn't think the rest of the lyrics were up to the level of those two lines, or of the music. Of course, the lyrics are probably secondary to the music in this type of song. But that's where I would put some attention. You'll get much better feedback here as more people listen to your song. You may also consider posting this over on the Lyrics boards where you will get some great advice on polishing your lyrics.

Great job!

Mark

"In theory, theory and practice are the same. In practice, they are not."
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