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Hi Indigo

And welcome to this place

I like your knack for programming, and production,. Lots of cool lttle things going on in here. There are lines in the song that I really liked, you don't have to go banannas on the lyrics in this style of music as 90% of the time it is not meant to be sophisticted lyrically. But I do agree with you, the more clever and unique lines and ideas The Better!!

Lots of good points and strong things to work off here.....
Nice flowing easy going melody, hypnotic track and vocal sound..... And good arrangement!!!

Some things that would help, ease off the echo. Especially in the verses early on
the timing is feeling funny. Also overall the song is crowded, between the syncopated grooves and parts and all the echo, the words and feel gets lost.

I would bring the echo in a tad less mainly on the chorus as it felt like part of the hook there. The track could use a tad of stripping down, build ups and drop downs,
dynamics. Everything kinda comes at you all at once.

I know that's how this style is, but if you play around with theses ideas it can have cross over/ pop potential as well.

There's a section in the middle end that just gets crazy with a fast drum loop jumping in. I would edit that right out of there as it's not working out well.
It sounds like another song started playing somewhere and i was looking all over my screne for another player to shut it off

Great potential and a very fresh listen for these boards as another style of making music. I dabble very very very little with that style, And if so it's usually part of an instrumental... Harder to do than people think, and writing words for it is a whole nother challenge all together

Good work & all the best!