Hi Lynn,

Nice work! Would be great to hear your melody ideas, Hope that mic set up works out.

Of course the melody and sound of the song is gonna play a huge roll in what works.

I like a lot of lines in here, but some words I would pull personally.

1) confidante - to hard a sounding word for me, and so early in the song.
not romantic or endearing.

2) pretenses - this one has the support of "fences" but again it's early in the chorus and is not such an everyday word.

I don't like it as much being first I thought switching them may be more effective.
Or take away what I call the "book kinda word" effect.

I like the action of tearing down fences" right after "Lets start now"

Let’s start now,
We’ll tear down all these fences,
Let’s start now,
We'll put aside pretenses
You’ve always been a touch away,
I think it's time, today’s the day,
We’ll let love show us how,
Baby let’s start now.

That's all that really felt awkward to me... It's like if you had more words like those in song it would be a better blend. So the "cofnidante" is the only thing that rally feels off to me..



Thanks!
Peace Mike
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