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Caroline, you hit me right where it hurts the most - deep down in the hook line!
I agree with you, and that central line needs to come across. I'm not sure I like the aestetics of the Rambo analogy, allthough I recognize the relvance. It is absolutley appropriate, but I feel it is too obvious. I guess I need to think hard, or just let it go for a while.
You are right about the last lines of the bridge, it is an attempt to rewrite the previous bridge, that read like this:
Trained up in Wyoming for the desert storms To hunt’em down in Texas on the Rodeos Ropin’ bulls for breakfast in the Vegas sun And in the evening she’s out there ropin’em Just for fun
But I wanted to edit out the rodeo theme, as I don't think there is room for the war metaphor and the rodeo metaphor in the same song. I guess I did'nt go far enough with the editing.
So thank you so much for engaging in this, you can't believe how much I appreciate your efforts - it's not applicable to writing!
Hope to get a hold of this one soon, it's killing me :-)
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