JPF Home Page Forums Lyric and MP3 Feedback MP3 Feedback Forum Now I Lay Me Down

Hi Jan and Greg:

Musically, I think this is terrific.

Lyrically, I think it is a very cool idea to start with that prayer that everyone has said and then modify it as you go. The verse lyrics are very well-written too, I think.

And I love the ending with the children singing.

The only thing I'm not sold on is the structure of the story. It feels to me like the tiny angel part should come last - like he was able to see how his father wasted so many years and the implication that he wasn't going to make the same mistake. Coming first as it does kinda just makes it seem like two independent story lines to me.

I might be missing something, of course. You had it posted on the lyric board so it sounds like you vetted it pretty thoroughly. I tried to find the thread but it must have been awhile back...

I dunno - see what others say. Might just be me....

Has a lot of power to it, in any case.

Scott