Hey there Mike,

This is a real toe-tapper. Loved the chorus in particular, and with a cleaner production, it has terrific potential.

The only lyrical thought I had was perhaps some inclusion of her having manicured nails? Your hook is about the ring, you mention your calloused hands...maybe to bring it full circle (no pun intended) you could set up that dramatic juxtaposition as well. Since there seems to be some question about the Gucci (pants), maybe you include it here:

you strut around with your Guccis FAKE NAILS on
And stare at me like I ain’t worth a damn

I think "nails" is understood in the verse prior to it, so maybe you don't need it (thereby avoiding the repetition)?

Either way, I agree you've got a winner-in-the-making here. Good luck!!

Cheers,
Beth

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