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11/29/11 -- OK, getting ready to dust this off again. I've re-mixed a little, added a piano part -- but I still need to re-do the first verse (some crackling in there) and add more harmonies. Plus there are some phrasing/melodic suggestions down below that I want to consider.

For those reading along for the first time, you will see discussions on a "TV" section. No one liked it and I canned it -- see I do listen to suggestions!!

Few questions:
1.) Are the drums too much? I can sample other drum parts
2.) Think of changing line 1 to "Many years ago" -- better or not much of a difference.
3.) How's the mix?
4.) Does the lead vocal need to lowered slightly? (I thought I adjusted it, but it still sounds loud).
5.) Who added those stars?? I appreciate it, but it seems sort of awkward.

One of MAB's crew came up with a song about a big truck that was a Christmas present. That inspired me to give a Christmas song a try (different story line, of course).

Music/phrasing is still awkward here and there, I plan on re-recording next weekend -- so suggestions are welcome.

Kevin

P.S. If you are under headphones and hear extraneous voices it is just the TV and fam upstairs -- you're not going crazy (I always pull the headphones off and go what?? But no one is there! Actually, there are lots of extraneous noises in there.

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Red Fire Truck
(c) Emmrich 2010

Back long ago,
I remember a Christmas season
my dad always saying that
things happen for a reason

well that year I prayed and hoped,
that, besides the GI Joe,
I would get my heart's desire in that toy store window

I said "God, I know you're near, please tell Santa
I was good this year, and can you ask him for me please ...

(chorus)
bring me that red fire truck
with the dalmatian and bells
and the ladders and the siren
and you'll never hear me crying
and if you do this for me
you'll have no regrets
cause I'll never ask for anything else

(verse)
but Dad got laid off in November
it was tough to pay bills in December
mama cried, Dad said, don’t worry, it’s time for gifts

went to joe's last chance junkyard
scrounged for wheels and truck parts
and we spent the week fixing,
painting, making it look sleek

While I sanded, the TV came on
some boy was on Santa's lap
and then he begged and pleaded to him

(chorus again)

and although I knew what was coming
I still ran down to unwrap
and I swear it was my best Christmas ever

so today when my boy told me what he desired
I knew just what to do.
Yea I could just buy it,
but my son deserves the best I can do

You see, he asked me please:

(chorus again)

Kevin: Vocals, Acoustic Guitar
BIAB: drums, bass, acoustic guitar