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Lot Long
by Gary E. Andrews - 11/10/26 11:20 AM
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Joined: Jul 2005
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Great story, Kevin. Really resonated with me because my dad used to do the same thing. It's funny that I now remember the times we spent working more than I do the finished product.  This feels pretty good to me - yeah some phrasing issues but those are easily solved. The only part I'm not entirely sold on is the part where the kid is on TV. It seems a little off the story - and used primarily as a way to get to the chorus again. I wonder if there isn't a more effective way to get back to the chorus and still keep the story tight? Very nice work on this - I would keep nibbling away at the lyric until it's there. Scott
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