I agree with Dan. This has Hallmark card written all over it. Great for greeting cards, not so much in songwriting. I think it was Jason Blume that said, "Think Wal-Mart, not Hallmark!"

Put specific details in your verses, concrete words (items you can photograph), paint a picture for us to see. Make it easy for the music video director when the song is about to be released.


“I usually start with a title or maybe a little rhyme or phrase.” - Harlan Howard

Co-writing = Compromise!