Hi, I like the gist, but I'd end the chorus on the hook,and try to find something stronger than
Give me plenty of sugar baby

kinda like
Can't you see
The hunger in me
turn me on dont switch me off
Baby I'm going cazy
Serve me some love

anyway just an idea,
all the best,john


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