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Lot Long
by Gary E. Andrews - 11/10/26 11:20 AM
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Hey you got your muse on!! Must be all those cookies giving you that sugar high. Short and sweet and I like your clever rhyming. Nothing's wrong w/the song, but I offer a few use or lose ideas. In the 1st verse maybe say barmaid since right away you will establish it's a female so maybe... I met a temptin' barmaid in Toledo For your Chorus I thought it might sound neat if the 1st line always referred back to the woman so instead of: (Chorus) But I had to hit the street Cause I got nomadic feet I had to go I just couldn't stay I must be moving on And I'll miss her while I'm gone Maybe we'll meet again someday And although that girl was sweet Seems I have nomadic feet I had to go I just couldn't stay I must be movin' on And I'll miss her while I'm gone Maybe we'll met again someday Then maybe add on one more Chorus which will be your Final Chorus so you'll have 4 total (the song is short enough that it won't hurt) Possible Final Chorus Though the memories are sweet Seems I'm no good on a leash I had to go I just couldn't stay Cos a rambler can't lay low When it's time to go I go But maybe we'll meet again someday Yeah maybe we'll meet again someday or (Just maybe we'll meet again someday) Best, Lynn 
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