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I'm blocked and stuck and can't seem to get out of this rut I'm in.
No inspiration. No joy. No sun.
It's cold here in Buffalo and only getting colder.

I was told that in these moments to just write something. Anything. So I started to, but only got this far....


I sat down and wrote a song today
thinking up words in the usual way
not really sure what I wanted to say
but I did it anyway

what can you do
when there's nothin' to do
but sit around thinkin''bout
who knows what?
might as well
get it all down on paper
put it to music
and share your thought

I stood up and walked around today
a step at a time in the usual way
my joints weren't sure
think they wanted to stay
but I did it anyway

What can you do
when there's nothin' to do
but walk around thinkin' 'bout
where to next?
might as well
keep it all moving forward
??????????


Peace,

Dave

What can you do
when there's nothin' to do
but walk around thinkin' 'bout
where to next?
might as well
keep it all moving forward
??????????

What can you do
when there's nothin' to do
but walk around thinkin' 'bout
how to move forward
The mind is willing
The heart is encouraged
But the pressure of time
on my back is torture

I like the directness of your preamble, (the above quote) and thought, this is going to be good. Could you do something with that first part ??

So try something like this. From the word, moments…..think of a title hook……like

Hold on, Hold on, Hold on, Hold on.

Next, establish a basic rhythm w that hook.
Then, go back and re-write the preamble to this rhythm.

You then will have first verse and a short chorus
And a rhythm.

I will do music for that minimal, and post here in jumpshare player. Yes? No?
Bill

Yes. Thank you, Bill.

I'll work on this and post tomorrow.

Peace,

Dave

Thank you, JAPOV.

I'm leaning towards more inspirational, if that makes sense? Ending the thought with "in spite of the obstacles, you should still try" kind of thing.

I appreciate the read and feedback!!

Peace,

Dave

David................ I try not to write when I'm not in the mood. It's not very helpful to me personally.

if you're in a rut, try to write something you normally wouldn't, like upbeat, happy, silly, funny, danceable.......That usually breaks the ice for me.

Rhythm.

1 2
1 2
1 2
1 2

Block, stuck
No out
Big rut
Walk about
No joy
No sun
Am I
The only one

Japov: time pressure chocks creativity

Kay-Lynn: give it time.

In 2/4 time sig

Bill

Well Bill, sometimes helping someone else gets you where you want to go. (How Life works) LOL

You can give me some verses for the song I posted that I'm stuck on (??)) What It's Not............

no pressure, just an idea. (smile)

Just had to finish my thought...

The mind is willing
The heart is encouraged
But the pressure of age
On my back is torture

Searching for meaningful change
The answer is always the same
Keep moving forward

The sun and moon keep time
The stars continue to shine
Eternal hope of the infinite mind
On and on and on

My eyes are dim
My hands loose their strength
The grey in my hair
Remembers its length

Searching... On and on and on