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JPF is Back
by John Lawrence Schick - 07/30/26 06:35 PM
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by Gary E. Andrews - 07/24/26 08:58 PM
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Lawn Mower DUI by Jacqueline Richter Copyrighted 2013. All Rights Reserved. His bad day started the night before his Old lady had a suitcase waiting at the door Told him you never help me out around here Just sit on your ass and drink your beer Better mow the lawn or I'm gonna leave He grinned and said One-way tickets are cheap He got a Lawn Mower DUI Made Turtle to Rabbit in 3.5 WAS CRAFTSMAN DRIVE BY Woulda made Jones proud Before sirens blared, He was having fun If only he could turn back Time and hold his tongue She didn't find humor in his little joke Cause she left and his flat screen was broke Instead of the highway He shoulda gone straight, cuz passing the doughnut store sealed his fate His mugshot was ugly two raccoon eyes if she came back now He'd be her prize He got a Lawn Mower DUI Made Turtle to Rabbit in 3.5 WAS CRAFTSMAN DRIVE BY Woulda made Jones proud Before sirens blared, He was having fun If only he could turn back Time and hold his tongue While sitting in the clink, he Heard an angel say, should I get you out or make you pay? He never got another DUI On Saturdays, it was Turtle to Rabbit in 3.5 WAS CRAFTSMAN DRIVE BY Woulda made Jones proud Before she got him out, He was having fun If only he could turn back Time and hold his tongue http://www.reverbnation.com/jacquelinerichter
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As I dont know a lot of the words Jackie, hard to comment...
He got a Lawn Mower DUI
Turtle to Rabbit in 3.5
WAS CRAFTSMAN DRIVE BY
But I will have another look later today
God Bless Roy and Helen
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His bad day started the night before his lady had a suitcase packed at the door Told him you never help me round here Just sit on your ass and drink your beer Better mow the lawn soon or I'm gonna leave He grinned and said Darlin, that's okay with me She didn't find the humor in his stupid joke Cuz NOW she's long gone and his big screen's is broke Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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Hi Roy and Calvin,
Thank you for taking a peek : )
~Jackie
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Another unique idea with strong images from you.
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Jackie, have you been reading the Tennessean? This sounds like a real story that happened recently. Some guy had so many DUIs his wife took his car keys, so when he was in need of liquid refreshment, he hopped on his John Deere lawn tractor and drove to the store. He got his DUI on the way home.
(I see you live in Florida, but you can read most any newspaper you want online these days.)
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For those of you who think this story is not hit song material, I point to a big hit in the '90s by Vince Gill, "Give Me One More Last Chance" was the title, I think.
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Hi Cowboy,
I did hear about something about this on the news/radio. It inspired me had to write this one : )
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Cool,
I like the idea. Keep at it!
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At least now I know that I'm not the only one who finds good song ideas in the daily news...
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Hi Friends,
I wrote this one a while ago. Since Georgette Jones (daughter of George Jones and Tammy Wynette) followed me on Twitter, I am more determined than ever to get this one set to music and I am searching for a collaborator/s.
Thanks,
Jackie
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I'm with Roy on this... its a bit short on content and so I don't fully get it... Calvin's addition makes it clearer...
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I'm with Roy on this... its a bit short on content and so I don't fully get it... Calvin's addition makes it clearer... Thanks Noel for your feedback, I changed back to my original version. -Jackie
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I will never know if George would have liked this one :'(
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I think George would have liked it. I tried to sing it in his style but couldn't seem to get a handle on it.
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Nice work, I saw an article about a guy doing this too. Was drinkin a beer when they pulled him over. Good story and fun to read. Good luck, I hope you get music for it!
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Judging by the George Jones reference I'm assuming your intention was to steer this in a Country singers direction. I got that sort of vibe even before reading your comments. It's a fun lyric that I think could really work in that genre. I could hear this done to a simple acoustic arrangement with some harmonies thrown in on the chorus.
Tom W.
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Made more changes to this one, think it is smoother but not sure about the bridge...
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