Awesome atomosphere and vocal and mesmerizing story. If that's you singing I am totally impressed. You've got some seriously rich pipes there and they really carry the story perfectly. Wow. I loved the chanting at the end. It caught me by surprise and was a great addition. My only nit is the weak rhyme in V2 at the ends of line 3 and 4. Your first verse is so damn solid and it set me up to think that V2 would be the same.

Overall, however, this is an amazing lyric with awesome production and vocals and it really sounds polished and ready for the next level. Very nicely done. I'm impressed.