Bobby, thanks for the input.
Due to yours and others suggestions I have changed the lyric slightly (see above) which I hope sings better now and makes it clearer.
I struggled to find an alternative to those two lines because I wanted to make clear that he had lost his mother, wife and children in an attack on his camp, which set him firmly on his path of revenge.
Thanks again.
Vic

Last edited by Vicarn; 08/22/13 12:45 PM.
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