Hi John,

There's a lot of beautiful lyrics here. I like the concept here. I think what would really empower this song, would be an expert guitarist using acoustic finger picking with this song. You might add a few strums in places, but I just think the constant strumming with the basic lead picking all together feels too separated or independent--JMO.

You have a great foundation for a very poignant song, nice write John, a very sad but "tender" song.

steady-eddie.