Hi John.
I like most of it.

At first I was reading the lyrics to the tune of Seven Spanish Angels but when the music started it reminded me of Dylan.

The third verse or bridge rhyme bothered me a little too.
If I may make a suggestion:

With reverence every young boy
Dreams his brave deeds linger on
And he'll walk among the titans
Who have carved their lives in stone.

Use or lose.
Vic


It's never too late? Yes it is, so do it now.

If, given time, a monkey can write the complete works of Shakespeare maybe there's hope for me.

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