Originally Posted by Fdemetrio
If songs didn't need structure, there were be no structure in songs.

I think he wrote here more than what he wanted to say, it's clearly conceived of and all the rhymes did not just come out.

The structure here is AAA, it wasn't chaotic or disorganized, the writer knew what he was doing. Generally the hook would come at end of the stanza, but I have seen it like this

I just think melodically to start with the best part of the song leaves you no where to go.

We shouldn't be critiquing the critiquer. Trying to up it even better

Why do you feel that I wrote more than I wanted to say? This song is everything I wanted to say. It was written very quickly ( in one weeks time), with only one minor line adjustment. And the rhymes did just come out........I was inspired. ;-)
Anyways........ Thanks, again!